tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post3391763608506888061..comments2024-02-17T09:53:06.168+00:00Comments on Notes from the Slushpile: Learning Story Structure from the Christmas Advert WarCandy Gourlayhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07802791643303335762noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-37245458940530301232016-01-04T22:46:39.026+00:002016-01-04T22:46:39.026+00:00Wow - yes Kate! I hadn't thought of that!Wow - yes Kate! I hadn't thought of that!Kathryn Evanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16439670363289229014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-46346197891574967502015-12-15T12:16:51.042+00:002015-12-15T12:16:51.042+00:00Thank you. Really helpful to spell out plot progr...Thank you. Really helpful to spell out plot progression / structure. I saw John Lewis ad as a metaphor. So man on the moon is her dead grandfather and parents indulge her grief and buy her the telescope so she still feels connected to him. Really poignant. Have a lovely Christmas. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09041258016634866403noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-90824639250966933322015-12-15T12:10:53.917+00:002015-12-15T12:10:53.917+00:00Really helpReally helpAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09041258016634866403noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-17802488257444705592015-12-14T17:15:44.577+00:002015-12-14T17:15:44.577+00:00I agree completely about the John Lewis advert. If...I agree completely about the John Lewis advert. If I'd written it, the little girl would have alerted her family to the old man's plight and they would have worked together to construct a spaceship, fly to the moon, and rescue the poor chap.<br />But I do like the Aldi advert and laugh every time I see it. There's nothing wrong with parody.<br />Merry Christmas everyone! Linda Dhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06799429286538446158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-30973127133365132082015-12-14T11:59:07.517+00:002015-12-14T11:59:07.517+00:00I did like the John Lewis advert in some senses bu...I did like the John Lewis advert in some senses but the lonely ending was so wrong for the purpose of it.Candy Gourlayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07802791643303335762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-14636549834775569962015-12-14T11:16:08.542+00:002015-12-14T11:16:08.542+00:00John Lewis' advert looked beautiful but was es...John Lewis' advert looked beautiful but was essentially vapid - all show and no depth.It tries too hard I think that Mog's Christmas has it all. For me it is the best ever xmas ad; funny, clever and ultimately unsoppily uplifting. LOVE this post, Kathy!Addy Farmerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00450583537731030466noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-27021407924431857292015-12-14T11:12:18.139+00:002015-12-14T11:12:18.139+00:00Candy did a great workshop on structure at the SCB...Candy did a great workshop on structure at the SCBWI conference - it really inspired me!Kathryn Evanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16439670363289229014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-91961736617736107822015-12-14T11:11:43.284+00:002015-12-14T11:11:43.284+00:00Absolutely!Where were the peer reviewers?!Absolutely!Where were the peer reviewers?!Kathryn Evanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16439670363289229014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-22377896103345836412015-12-14T11:11:10.701+00:002015-12-14T11:11:10.701+00:00I found it bizarre - not as odd as the Bloomingdal...I found it bizarre - not as odd as the Bloomingdales ad though...CREEPYKathryn Evanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16439670363289229014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-35673896659127823392015-12-14T11:10:10.716+00:002015-12-14T11:10:10.716+00:00James Scott Bell's Plot and Structure is also ...James Scott Bell's Plot and Structure is also excellent.Kathryn Evanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16439670363289229014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-44853027883749063392015-12-14T10:25:31.351+00:002015-12-14T10:25:31.351+00:00Love this post - thanks. I'm very instinctive ...Love this post - thanks. I'm very instinctive in writing and in life so struggle to break down story and see what I (or other people) am (are) doing. This is great!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02488094289848849951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-2386395145805710862015-12-14T10:22:14.814+00:002015-12-14T10:22:14.814+00:00Yep completely agree re John Lewis Ad. The ending ...Yep completely agree re John Lewis Ad. The ending sends out an appalling message that expensive presents are what's important - well they are to John Lewis i suppose. <br />Yet another instance where responding to some constructive independent feedback would have made all the difference.<br />Great post Kathy - thanks!Jan Carrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11335419896028312596noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-49784817216509256022015-12-14T10:03:47.516+00:002015-12-14T10:03:47.516+00:00Fantastic stuff. You've explained why the John...Fantastic stuff. You've explained why the John Lewis commercial didn't work for me ... It unsettled me but I couldn't explain why. Candy Gourlayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07802791643303335762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-701894736280253278.post-27277482229942753422015-12-14T08:48:56.052+00:002015-12-14T08:48:56.052+00:00I'm surprised John Lewis could get it so wrong...I'm surprised John Lewis could get it so wrong. I've heard many people comment (well, you make three) on the unsatisfactory ending. The structural elements you describe are so fundamental to our psychology. For anyone who can't get to a workshop I recommend asking Santa for 'The Writer's Journey'.Ana Salotehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13373695860557420762noreply@blogger.com