Showing posts with label Revision. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Revision. Show all posts

Tuesday, 5 January 2021

Mixing it Up - Challenging My Unconscious Biases to Add Diversity to My Writing

By Nick Cross

Photo by Mike Petrucci on Unsplash

I’ve spent the last year adapting a YA novel (that I originally wrote in 2012) into a graphic novel. In retrospect this was a big project to take on, especially during a pandemic, and there were many points during 2020 where I ground to a complete halt, questioning what I was trying to do. But at the end of November last year, after an almost complete rewrite of the original novel, the first draft was done. Phew. I had a short break and then dived into the much easier task of editing the manuscript.

As part of the editing process, I wrote out a list of all my characters: their name, age, gender and function in the story. But, as a way of challenging my own unconscious biases, I also wanted to add their ethnicity. So many times recently, I’ve heard or read about White* authors assuming that theirs is the default identity and not commenting on it, but then specifically calling out characters of colour.

As I read down my list, I started to get a sinking feeling: fifteen-year-old White British boy, forty-eight-year-old White British man, fifty-two-year-old White British woman, etc. Whitewash would be a pretty appropriate term. And it’s a problem that would be compounded in the graphic novel version of the book. In a novel, you can perhaps get away with fudging the ethnicity of a character, or relying on outdated tropes like describing someone’s “coffee-coloured skin” or “almond-shaped eyes.” But in a graphic novel, as with a film or TV show, the casting is visible in every frame.

Perhaps it was borderline acceptable eight years ago, when I first created the characters, for them to be so overwhelmingly White. But this is 2021, and I wanted to shake things up a bit and add more diversity to the mix. Except I then hit a different problem – how could I do that but also stay in my lane as a straight, White man?

A few years ago I wrote, and had published, short stories with a wide variety of first-person perspectives. These included a story about immigration from the perspective of a Black British teenager, and structural racism from the perspective of a Black girl from the deep south of America. But I didn’t have lived experience of any of this! I can't imagine sitting down today to write something like that without at least questioning my right to do it.

Of course, as a creative person in the UK, I have the undeniable freedom to write about whatever the hell I want. (White privilege alert!) But, I also have the responsibility to deliver a sellable manuscript to my agent, especially for the hypersensitive US market. And that’s not to forget my social responsibility to use my privilege in a positive and constructive way.

Director Armando Iannucci took an interesting approach with his recent film The Personal History of David Copperfield, turning the typical period drama on its head by employing colour-blind casting. It was a method I found inspiring in terms of the freedom to cast the best actor for the role, but also sometimes confusing. For instance, I fully bought into the idea that the titular character could be of Indian descent. But as a viewer, I found that my suspension of disbelief was affected by decisions such as giving a White character a Black parent without any explanation. Instead of being able to accept it, I found myself distracted from the narrative by questions about their heritage and whether they were adopted.

Aneurin Barnard as James Steerforth and Nikki Amuka-Bird as his mother Mrs. Steerforth in The Personal History of David Copperfield

Now, perhaps this is just my own prejudice talking, and other people were able to watch the film without worrying about this at all. But as a comparison, I found the heritage of Will in the TV adaptation of His Dark Materials to be much more believable. For my own novel , which is highly dependent on parent and child pairings, I don’t want to do anything that would make my readers think I’d simply made a weird mistake!

Ultimately, I’ve decided to keep my protagonist as a straight, White British boy to reflect my own heritage. But even eight years ago, I’d thought it was a good idea to have a girl of Korean descent as his co-protagonist and romantic foil, which has allowed me to expand her role in this draft and tie her heritage more tightly into the story. I ummed and ahed about changing the ethnicity of my baddie, but so far I’ve left her as a White woman, because I don’t feel comfortable with the stereotype of a Black antagonist. But what about the protagonist’s White best friend? One of his parents needed (for story reasons) to be White, but what about the other? Could they be a person of colour?

As well as adding some more ethnically diverse background characters, I’ve been able to make both the best friend and another teenage character mixed-race, without upsetting the story or (I hope) engaging in tokenism. That's not to suggest that having a mixed-race character is a shortcut, though - everyone has their own unique experience, and mixed-race people may find fitting in to be even more of a challenge than someone from a single ethnic group. But, just as nobody tells us who we can love nowadays, so the opportunities for diverse and interesting mixed-race characters have widened. No longer does mixed-race automatically mean one White and one Black parent – just look at the success of Spider-Man Miles Morales, who is of both Black and Puerto Rican heritage.


Tackling your own biases and revisiting your old work can lead to some uncomfortable realisations. For instance, I discovered that I’d given my antagonist a disfigurement in the form of a large facial birthmark. This was only mentioned once in the novel, but would be constantly visible in a graphic novel as a hamfisted and hurtful signifier of "evil." I also found that I’d given the Korean mother of my co-protagonist some questionable speech patterns. Both of these things were easily fixed, but they led me to reflect that there are almost certainly things in my manuscript of today that I will look back on in another eight years and wish I’d done differently. As with anything to do with writing outside your lane, nothing beats talking to an actual person from the ethnic/cultural group you're trying to represent. At later stages in the process, agents or publishers may bring in sensitivity readers, and it's a good idea to try to head off any issues they might report.

Society, as well as its norms and preconceptions, is constantly on the move. Just this morning, I had a fascinating discussion with my daughter about trans rights and identity politics – for her generation, gender fluidity is the norm, not the exception. And an increased awareness of intersectionality will doubtless lead to both new categorisations and new quandaries for those of us stuck in our conformist ways. As writers and artists creating work for modern readers, it’s our responsibility to stay alert, ask difficult questions of ourselves and be open to admitting when we get it wrong.

If all of this sounds like an uncomfortable process, full of unwritten rules just waiting to trip you up, take heart. Opening yourself to different cultures and different opinions is hugely enriching, as long as you're willing to listen as much as you talk. You can become a better writer and a better person too, and at the end of the day, isn't that why we're all here?

Nick.

* Author’s Note: I’ve chosen to capitalise both White and Black in this article, as signifiers of racial identity. There is much debate on this topic, see here for an example.



Nick Cross is a children's writer/illustrator and Undiscovered Voices winner. He received a SCBWI Magazine Merit Award, for his short story The Last Typewriter.
Nick is also the Blog Network Editor for SCBWI Words & Pictures magazine. His Blog Break column appears fortnightly on W&P.

Saturday, 18 July 2020

What if this is the Last Book You’ll Ever Write?

By Nick Cross

Photo by Kimberly Farmer on Unsplash

Not to get too morbid here, but it’s definitely going to happen that you’ll stop writing at some point in the future. Either through disease, or death, or taking up some exciting new hobby like competitive topiary. Would the knowledge that you’re writing your last book help or hinder your current work-in-progress?

Eight years ago, I became convinced that the book I was writing would be my last. My magnum opus. Of course, it didn’t help that I was suffering from a serious mental illness and feared that I might die at any second. Or that I felt my agent at the time was pressuring me to finish the book so we could get it out on submission. Anyhow, I pushed and struggled my way through that novel, with a weird mix of fear, self-hatred and messianic overconfidence.

Photo by Christine Keller on Unsplash

Looking back, I’m not sure how I got through that period. What I really should have done is stop writing and trying to get published, because that was part of the reason why I got sick in the first place. If I’d had more of a flair for the dramatic, perhaps I might have taken my own life after typing THE END. I certainly had plenty of suicidal thoughts to work with. But somehow I clung on, through the disappointment of my agent rejecting the book, through me leaving her and the book failing to find a publisher (thought to be fair, it hardly had a fair shot as I only sent it to three editors).

I was wrong about a lot of things from that period, not least that it would be the last book I’d ever write (I’ve written another four since then). But something has kept pulling my thoughts back to the novel I’d written during that dark time, a feeling of unfinished business. Was it still the masterpiece I’d imagined it to be?

Well, no.

It isn’t bad, actually, but it definitely isn’t world-changing in its current form. They say that you should leave your manuscript in a drawer for as long as you can to get a fresh perspective on it, but I’m not sure they were thinking about eight years! Still, I’d recommend it if you feel you can spare the time. With the benefit of hindsight, I can see now that it’s just a book, something that can be revisited and moulded into a different form. With the guidance of my new (and much nicer) agent, I’m doing just that, rewriting it as a graphic novel. The rewrite is still not an easy process, but at least there’s a lot less drama this time around.

It’s fascinating looking back at my life and work from such a distance, seeing how much my mental state bled into the characters I’d created. The protagonist is burdened by massive guilt and self-loathing, putting himself in dangerous situations in the hope he might be set free by death. Medication to control behaviour is everywhere. Even the overriding concept of the novel is an elaborate metaphor for depression.

Photo by Brandi Redd on Unsplash

If the novel I wrote reflected the man I was then, the new version will surely reflect me now – older, somewhat wiser and definitely more cynical. It’s ironic that we’ve just gone through another period of maximum fear and loathing during lockdown, a period that was not helpful in the least to my creative process, and during which I wrote very little. It’s only since the emergence of a tentative new normal that I’ve been able to start moving forward on the book again, to recognise the kind of persistent, low-level depression many of us have been suffering from in the last few months. And with that realisation comes the uncomfortable truth that I will never be truly free of mental illness, just better able to recognise and control it.

There’s an argument that knowing you were working on your final book wouldn’t change anything, because to write successfully you must pour the whole of yourself into the work, holding nothing back. And while I understand that theory, it also puts a hell of a lot of pressure on you as a writer, denying you the space to experiment and make mistakes. By all means, write your heart out and leave an amazing legacy of work for future generations. But don’t forget to be kind to yourself and others while you’re still here.

Nick.



Nick Cross is a children's writer/illustrator and Undiscovered Voices winner. He received a SCBWI Magazine Merit Award, for his short story The Last Typewriter.
Nick is also the Blog Network Editor for SCBWI Words & Pictures magazine. His Blog Break column appears fortnightly on W&P.

Monday, 9 January 2017

The Final Draft: Looking for Satisfactions

By Candy Gourlay

Happy 2017, Slushpilers!

I am happy to report that I think (fingers crossed) I am about to write my current novel for the LAST time.


I wrote the first draft to find my story.

I wrote a second draft to get to know my characters.

I wrote a third draft to lay down everything I thought had to be in my novel.  All the scenes I wanted, All the meaningful things I wanted to say. All the who does what where and how.

So. Final Draft. What do I want from it?

Satisfaction.

Not satisfaction for me. I've already had three drafts to do that. Satisfaction for the READER.

What can I do to this draft that will make the experience of reading it a satisfying one for the random reader?
I want my reader to be immediately drawn into my story, his curiosity whetted, his attention hooked so that he desperately needs to keep reading to find out what happens next. I want my reader to identify with my hero's predicament, see his own flaws in my hero's imperfections. I want my reader to commit to a long journey in the company of my hero, to rejoice when my hero rejoices and suffer when my hero suffers. And when all is lost, I want my reader to despair ... only to be born again when my hero finds his way out of his predicament.
I've spent the Christmas holidays endlessly re-reading my favourite books about writing, literally listing the faults of my manuscript and searching for solutions.

Here are Five Satisfactions that we owe our readers:

1. Dramatic tension

Alfred Hitchcock was once asked if he had a formula for creating dramatic tension. He replied by calling on his interviewer to imagine a bomb under a table. When the bomb explodes, the public will be surprised, but until it does, they will be oblivious. But if the public knows that the bomb is under the table, then they are complicit - they're part of the scene, longing to warn the characters that the bomb is about to explode. Boy, won't they just love that!

So, in revision, pay attention to whether your reader knows about ticking bombs in your plot. Can you rearrange scenes so that the reader is dreading someone's arrival or something happening? Is that bomb ticking loudly enough, is the reader feeling the pressure of time running out?  What your reader knows and what doesn't know is what makes him read on.


2. Delayed gratification

At some point last Christmas, the family watched Shakespeare in Love, the Tom Stoppard film starring Joseph Fiennes as Shakespeare and Gwyneth Paltrow as his inspiration for Juliet. Afterwards, I found myself listing all the  delicious satisfactions that the film had delivered at the very end, including :

• After all the cross dressing, boys playing girls and girls playing boys, Shakespeare and Viola at last end up playing Romeo and Juliet

• At the end of the play the holier-than-thou guy who was preaching that theatre was the devil's work is seen weeping and applauding the play

• Mean old Colin Firth, Earl of Wessex is humiliated royally

• we get to see Queen Judy Dench again!

Satisfactions!


3. Fun and Games

Over Christmas, I re-read Save the Cat by the late Blake Snyder, in which he demonstrated how to plot a story using a 'Beat Sheet' - if you haven't got the book, here's a blog post about how to plot using Snyder's beat sheet and here are sample beat sheets of films. Snyder says that at about page 30 of every 55 page script, there should be fun and games. Fun and games, he explained, "is where all the trailer moments of a movie are found."

Trailer moments??? Gah! I rushed to re-read my manuscript. Were there any moments that would make it to a film trailer if my book were a film?

Snyder wrote:
The fun and games section answers the question: Why did I come to see this movie? What about this premise, this poster, this movie idea, is cool?
When they plan set pieces for a movie, apparently this is where they put them. Snyder said realising this 'leapfrogged me ahead 10 places'. Snyder also called it the Promise of the Premise. What is the cool premise of your book? That high concept that you promised would make it stand above the rest?Have you kept your promise?


4. Mirroring

Reading about structure, you see a lot of stuff about mirroring. John Yorke in his book on story structure Into the Woods spent a chapter examining the patterns defined by eggheads from Shakespeare to Robert McKee (author of Story). Yorke ultimately concludes that a story in five acts reveals an extraordinary, underlying symmetry -- elements mirror each other in opposite and equal actions. Somehow there's something extra satisfying in creating such symmetries. Here are some mirrorings and symmetries to look out for:

Journey into the woods • journey back - It was from Yorke that I first heard of the Midpoint - which is exactly at a story's halfway point, a concept first identified by Syd Field who said it was "an important scene in the middle of the script, often a reversal of fortune or revelation that changes the direction of the story." Yorke calls the first half the hero's journey "into the woods". The second half, is the hero's journey back. The midpoint, smack dab in the middle, is a moment in the story when "something profoundly significant occurs". James Scott Bell, author of Plot and Structure, has helpfully written an ebook devoted to the Midpoint, Write Your Novel From the Middle. Imma gonna try that next time.

Opening scene • final scene - Blake Snyder writes: "The very first impression of what a movie is -- its tone, its mood, the type and scope of the film -- are all found in the opening image" while "the final image is the opposite of the opening image. It is proof that change has occurred." It sure would be a nice touch to have mirroring opening and final chapters.

Hero • Villain - Just before New Year someone posted a link on Facebook to David Villalva's infographic Three Ways to Create a Villain.

Number one way is: The villain functions as a reflection of the hero. Woops, I thought. Have I done enough work on my hero and my villain? I sat down and drew a two-column chart, comparing my hero and my villain. I discovered that I had done this without realising it. But having it articulated to me meant that I could get in there and make things even better.

Danger • Opportunity - writing about crisis, climax and resolution, Robert McKee in Story says the Chinese ideogram for 'Crisis' fittingly describes two things: danger and opportunity.
'Danger' in that the wrong decision at this moment will lose forever what we want; 'Opportunity' in that the right choice will achieve our desire.
So the final draft is a chance to ask, have I made every danger in my story an opportunity for my hero? Well not every danger. But it's an interesting way to examine plot peril and develop conflict. Eg: Crisis is the moment when the hero comes face to face with all the forces of antagonism against him. Luke Skywalker pilots the X Wing Fighter into the Death Star. The Climax is one final action by the protagonist that settles everything. Luke destroys the Death Star. And finally, the Resolution. Luke gets a medal. Danger is Opportunity.


5. Character

The greatest task when writing a final draft, is to switch from your bleary author eyes to the nice fresh eyes of a reader so that you can SEE, nay, get to KNOW your characters as if you'd never met them before.

But it does take a lot of forgetting to set aside, in some cases, years of time spent creating, growing, writing your characters. Can you really see them as your reader will see them? Or are you too close, too emotionally attached, too fed up to identify what it is they need to come to life.

It is interesting though, sometimes as your character deepens and becomes richer in nuance, a magical thing happens. You find yourself changing your story, plugging holes in the plot, turning mere obstacles into turning points, everything suddenly growing in meaning and depth. Don't be surprised if your character's voice changes, perhaps she might even develop a life of her own, suddenly introducing scenes that you had not envisioned before.

In On Film Making - An Introduction to the Craft of the Director, Alexander Mackendrick, who made the film Ladykillers, writes :
A situation that seems promising but lacks the momentum to keep going all the way to the end may be a premise not yet explored to its full potential.  
How do you explore the full potential of your story? Character! If you go to your characters and ask them every question, you will find every answer.

If you liked this post you might enjoy Exposition: It's About Emotion not Information

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Candy Gourlay is the author of Tall Story and Shine. Visit her website www.candygourlay.com

Monday, 6 May 2013

Slushpile Chat: an Author and Agent Discuss the Art of Revision

Agent Jenny Savill (left) and author Sara Grant join Notes from the Slushpile to share a few tips on how to improve your manuscript and pitch your work to agents. Jenny is an agent at Andrew Nurnberg Associates Ltd and Sara is the author of Dark Parties.   

Sara: I used to hate to revise a manuscript.

The joy of writing came from that initial rush of telling myself the story. Once I’d written the story down once, I had a difficult time going back and figuring out how to make it better. Reading and re-reading a manuscript from start to finish might catch the typos, but this linear review doesn’t often significantly improve a story.

Sara's YA books (US covers)

I read a lot about revision and devised a system of reviewing my manuscript that looks at the big picture first and then by character and chapter, scene, paragraph, sentence and ultimately word by word. Revision can be a painful and endless process, but it’s necessary and incredibly rewarding.

Would you agree, Jenny? How many times do your writers typically revise their manuscripts with you and then with an editor?

Jenny: I agree, and the answer is: multiple times.

I will take on an author because I am excited by their writing. For me, it’s a strange combination of personal literary taste, instinct, commercial musings and, strongest of all, a conviction that here is a project that deserves to see the light of day – a story that needs to be shared with editors, a manuscript that deserves to become a book.

If I can visualise it on the shelf, I’m half way to phoning the author. Having taken the author on, I will work with them to get their manuscript to a point where it is submittable to editors. Sometimes this involves a lot of work, sometimes not so much, depending on the issues with the project when it arrives with me – all manuscripts have different things that need working on. It’s not unusual for an author to do several revisions with me, followed by tweaking.

On occasion, a manuscript can land in my Inbox where all the main elements of the novel are already working to a high degree. These projects will typically need only a couple of small revisions to get them ready for submission to editors.

Much as I enjoy working with authors, there are only so many hours in the day

Much as I enjoy working with authors, there are only so many hours in the day and this is of course the sort of manuscript I pray for..! So, before submitting to agents, writers need to do all they can to get their draft manuscript as ready as possible. You want your manuscript to knock an agent’s socks off, but if the agent is stumbling over spelling or typos, never mind plot inconsistencies or pacing problems, there’s obviously less chance of that happening.

 So, my advice is to learn how to revise your manuscript – speak to other authors, listen to editors - and find a way of doing it that works for you. Revisions don’t stop once you have an agent – and they carry on once you have an editor. They are a necessary on-going process.


Sara: It’s good to know that I’m not alone with multiple revisions. You will probably recall that I received nine, single-spaced revision notes from my US editor on the first round of edits for Dark Parties. (And I learned from her blog that she typically writes up to twelve pages of notes to writers the first time around.) Published authors don’t often talk about this exhaustive revision process.

I supposed we’d like our readers to believe our novels come out perfectly formed. Oh, if that were only the case.

Sara's younger fiction 

It’s easy for writers to get pulled in a million different directions during revision. When I talk to other writers about revision – whether it’s one on one or during a workshop – one of the first things I ask them to consider is: What’s at the heart of their story? Why are they writing it and why are they the only person who can write it?

If you want to be published – as you’ve pointed out, Jenny, writing is collaboration with agents and editors. You have to know why you are writing your story and what’s important to you so that when agents or editors ask for changes – and they most certainly will – you know the heart of your story and you can remain true to that throughout the revision process. This clarity of purpose shines through the prose organically and subtly.

That’s one of my top tips for revision. What’s one of your top tips for writers?

Jenny: One of my top tips would be this. During the revision process your manuscript will change – sometimes in dramatic ways. You might find that if you write in the first person it brings the voice alive; that if you change the tense the story flows more easily; or that two very different narrators, rather than one, add tension and texture to a flat narrative.

Perhaps you need to flesh out the world of the story. Perhaps you need to rein it in. It might be that the manuscript stays basically the same structurally and changes only in more subtle ways, but one of the things that tends to happen is that old stuff from earlier drafts lingers in the latest draft.

So part of revising should be checking for stuff that no longer belongs in your manuscript and getting rid of it. This sounds easy enough, but when you’ve been looking at your story for months on end, it can be really hard to spot these things, and what you don’t want to do is end up deleting something that is actually working.

Part of revising should be checking for stuff that no longer belongs in your manuscript and getting rid of it

 So, take a break, do something else or write something completely different for a while. Give the manuscript to someone who hasn’t read it before to read and feedback on. Return to it with fresh eyes, at which point there is a checklist of things you can do to make sure it is working – and this is where Sara, armed with her highlighter pens (!), excels. Hers is a helpful, hands-on strategy to help authors revise methodically, without losing sight of the heart of their story, or the reasons they started to write it in the first place.

Sara: After you’ve polished your revision until it sparkles, the best piece of advice I can give writers is: GET AN AGENT!

I tell anyone who will listen how important it is to have an agent. On a personal level, writers need someone who can offer advice and critique. And from a business prospective, agents can market your work globally in a way that writers simply can’t. They know the market and business of publishing so writers can focus on their story.

I knew from our first meeting that Jenny was the agent for me. She understood Dark Parties and was genuinely interested in teen fiction. I wanted a partner in the process from brainstorming ideas to giving editorial feedback along the way. And Jenny has exceeded my expectations in every way imaginable.

So, Jenny, what are you looking for in a writer? Any do’s and don’t’s for people who are submitting to you?

Jenny: *blushes* I look for a good understanding in the writer of who they are writing for, what they are writing and why they are writing it. A sense of humour is always good. Not only does it make working with an author fun, it helps us through the tricky patches. The willingness to receive feedback in the spirit in which it is given and to work really, really hard at revising, going forward.

In the writing, I want to feel from the first page that the writer is in control of the story and that I, the reader, am in safe hands. I love being surprised - by an original voice, a character who confounds the reader’s expectations, a plot that doesn’t go where you think it will, brave use of language or structure, an unusual setting.

Make me laugh. Make me cry. Give me a stunning and satisfying ending

The thing that children’s books often do so much better than adult books is to give the reader a fresh and insightful take on the familiar- so I will be looking out for this. Make me laugh. Make me cry. Give me a stunning and satisfying ending, even if there is to be a sequel.

Sara: Speaking of satisfying endings, I think we should wrap up for now.

My final advice is READ! READ! READ! Read the genre and age range similar to the book you are writing. Read the books you wished you’d written. Read the classics but also what’s new on bookshelves.

Dissect the stories you adore and determine how the author made you fall in love with his/her book.

Also buy the book. Support your fellow writers and the industry you want to join.

Best of luck with crafting and editing and revising you novels!

Sara and Jenny have teamed up to offer a day-long workshop on 15th June and again on 2nd November to help writers polish their manuscript and make it stand out from the slushpile.

Sunday, 8 May 2011

SCBWI Revision Masterclass: Sara Grant is Born Again


On Saturday I attended a SCBWI Masterclass: Sara Grant's Revision Game. Sara is a writer and senior commissioning editor at Working Partners. Her first YA novel Dark Parties will be published in the US (Little, Brown), UK (Orion) and Germany (Droemer) in 2011. At Working Partners she has helped plot, write and revise more than fifty books for children of all ages, and she is a founder and editor of the amazing Undiscovered Voices.

So there I was: all set for a nice relaxing lunch, a pub, a little learning and conversation, right? I was feeling a bit fragile after a legendary garden party with the neighbours the previous evening, but it isn't like I've never revised a novel before - though my answer to problems has generally been to write the next novel better, rather than go over and over and over the same ground. And I'd even done my homework, so figured I should coast through the day quite okay.

Wrong! This was boldly revising where I have never revised before.

Sara set us straight right from the beginning:

'I'm a born again revisionist, and I'm here to convert: so watch out!' - Sara Grant.

I stuck with one of my Slushpile resolutions: I took a camera, and actually used it. But although I tried to photograph Sara many times, most came out like one of those cartoons where the superhero zooms so fast all you see are an outline and a vapour trail.

A Born Again Revisionist: Sara in Motion

Hard at work!


Revising can be colourful

My top five take-away points for the day:
  • revision is all about knowing the difference between what you thought you've put on the page, and what is actually on the page;
  • don't do micro-editing to avoid macro-editing! Fix the big stuff - plot, POV, tense, characters - before you worry about the picky details;
  • I love word cloud: you can paste your whole novel in, and see your most used words; you can display them in lots of colours and patterns and fonts! Pretty, but it also lets you see if the things you think are important are there, and if the things that aren't, are (I am embarrassed to admit how prominent the word 'just' is in all of my novels. Not that I've been compulsively checking them. All day. I just can't help myself....);
  • read Robert McKee's Story! It has been sitting on my shelf, beckoning, for quite some time, but I have resolved to dust it off very soon;
  • finally, for me, the thing that resonated the most was the homework Sara set. I'll go into this in some detail, below.
When Sara sent the email with our homework around in advance of the masterclass, I must confess: I GROANED when I saw what we were asked to do. I protested; I wailed; I procrastinated. Then, I did it.

I'll paraphrase what we were to do to my own understanding, with a little help from Robert McKee. We were asked to look at our novel, and come up with the following. The heart of our story: why we were writing it, why it is important to us, why it is our story. Then, the story's premise: the 'what if', the idea that inspired the story. Next, the controlling idea: a concept from McKee's Story: 'the story's ultimate meaning expressed through the action and aesthetic emotion of the last act's climax.' Finally, the pitches: a one line pitch, a paragraph pitch, and movie style pitch.

For me this was a seriously valuable exercise. Even though it was painful, I felt I had a much clearer vision of my story, where it was going, and why it should reach that destination.

Thanks, Sara!

Sara slows to normal human speed at the pub afterwards,
her superhero tasks done for the day


We all survived! Me and Mo

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